That article inspired me and got me thinking about my work. I did this comic book script back in July, right before Comic Con. It’s based off a short story I wrote called, Snooze, Booze, and Away. I posted that here a while back; it’s towards the very beginning of this blog. I showed the script to a few artists, got a few emails going back and forth, got excited, and then…silence. Now it’s the end of the year and I felt like sharing the opening of this story with you. I know, it’s short for an opening, mainly because I was able to get the idea across smoothly. At least I think I did. If anyone is interested or just wants to give me feed back, please feel free.
Page 1-FIVE PANELS
Panel 1: Open with a close up of Adam, a dark haired, thick framed glasses wearing, twenty three year old college student. (Think Clark Duke) Currently, Adam is bleeding from his nose and mouth. His right eye is swelled shut, while blood swims in his left eye; bruises have begun to appear on his face. The lenses on his glasses are smudged with bloody fingerprints. Adam is getting his ass kicked, bad. Given his current situation, Adam continues to smile.
Caption: Not the best park in Los Angeles, California.
Character: Adam
Dialogue: Ever thought being a twenty three year old college student was tough? Yeah, me too. Ever thought that having the ability to transform into a superhero was cool? Yeah, me too! Ever though this transformation would take place once a month, like some teenage whores over-bloody period? Didn’t think so bitch, but guess what, it happened to me. And if there was ever a night to want that period, it would have been tonight.
Panel 2: The park appears creepier at night. We see a tree on the right near our characters and three more off in the distance. We are angled from behind, Adam has his back turned to us. His head is now cocked to the left as five cholos, dressed in baggy pants and over sized t-shirts stand facing him. Four of the cholos surrounding Adam cheer, hands in the air, yelling with excitement, as the fifth stands directly in front of Adam. His left fist is barreling into Adam’s face. Blood escapes Adam’s mouth.
Panel 3: We are looking upwards now as if lying on the ground. The cholos seem larger, more menacing from this angle. The attacking cholo, Enrique, is now pointing at us; he looks pissed.
Character: Enrique
Dialogue: You puto, you knew not to mess with us! You think you can go around talking shit? Guess what ese, this is my turf, and no fucking cabron is going to come up in here and tell me and my crew what to do!
Characters: Jose & Elmer
Dialogue: (from the crowd of cholos) Yeah kick his ass Enrique! Jack he wallet aye!
Panel 4: Adam is on all fours, struggling to get up. We see the legs of the cholos as they surround Adam.
Character: Adam
Dialogue: HA! Is this the best you got? I’ll beat the…
Panel 5: Enrique kicks Adam hard in the ribs, the impact knocking the air out of Adam.
Character: Adam
Dialogue: AHHHH!
Page 2: FIVE PANELS
Panel 1: Adam rolls over on his back, struggling for air. His hands wrap around his body, as if trying to hold his insides in.
Character: Hector
Dialogue: Good one Enrique. Finish this cabron off!
Panel 2: Adam is still on the floor facing upwards, as Enrique takes a step forward moving next to him.
Character: Adam
Dialogue: You may be thinking, “what the hell is this kid talking about,” right about now. Periods and superheros? This has to be someone else’s drunken nightmare right?
Panel 3: We see Enrique lift his right foot high into the air above Adam’s face, ready to slam it down and finish Adam.
Panel 4: From Adam’s POV looking up from the ground. We see Enrique grinning as the other cholos watch in the background.
Character: Enrique
Dialogue: Any last words ese?
Panel 5: Close up of a bruised and broken Adam, similar to page one, panel one. Adam grins right back.
Character: Adam
Dialogue: Yeah, you can’t beat me! I’m a fucking superhero!
Character: Adam
Narrative Caption: Let me take you back to how it all began.
-S(D)A